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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some people that
education
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 is based on learning
facts
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 rather than practical
skills
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in
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 all levels of
education
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. Learning
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 constitutes
important
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steps
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 in acquiring professional
skills
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.
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is totally disagreed
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 with
statement
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 that
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 are given preference over practical
skills
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 at all levels of
education
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. First and foremost,
entire
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education
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 system is based on
facts
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. Pupils are taught based on
accuracy
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the accuracy
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 of scientific
facts
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 which develops their logical and rational thinking.
Facts
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forms
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 the basis of learning which
help
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helps
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 learners distinguish between theories and practical
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aspects
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 of learning complex subjects like science and maths.
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, In the US
student
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students
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 are inspired to focus on research rather than mugging up the
facts
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 just to clear exams. The entire
education
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 system is based on concept building based on
facts
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.
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,
facts
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 are dependent on
notion
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 and concepts.
Skills
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 are based on concepts. In order to become proficient in
skills
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 learners have to
understood
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facts
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 first
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then
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and then
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 apply them in life.
Skills
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 are practical application of
facts
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 on which
professional
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professionals
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 have been taught. Practical
skills
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 are
extension
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an extension
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 of knowledge taught in schools and universities. There can not be a case where
skills
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 can be acquired without knowledge of
facts
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.
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, in medical science Without factual knowledge of
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 body surgery can not be taught. In conclusion,
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skills
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 are requisite to survive in
practical
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the practical
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 world still
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 importance
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 learning can not be underestimated. I am of the opinion that
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facts
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 learning is
much
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 important and in
learnings
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learning
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 at all levels of
education
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 focus is given to factual learning.
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Ensure your essay contains a clear thesis statement that reflects your opinion. In the body paragraphs, focus on developing clear topic sentences followed by explanations and examples that directly relate to your thesis. Make certain that your examples are specific and substantiated, to demonstrate clear relevance to the topic.
coherence cohesion
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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