Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by some people that
education
is based on learning
facts
rather than practical
skills
in
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all levels of
education
. Learning
facts
constitutes
important
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steps
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in acquiring professional
skills
.
This
essay
is totally disagreed
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with
statement
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the statement
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that
facts
are given preference over practical
skills
at all levels of
education
. First and foremost,
entire
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the entire
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education
system is based on
facts
. Pupils are taught based on
accuracy
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the accuracy
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of scientific
facts
which develops their logical and rational thinking.
Facts
forms
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the basis of learning which
help
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learners distinguish between theories and practical
aspect
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aspects
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of learning complex subjects like science and maths.
For instance
, In the US
student
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students
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are inspired to focus on research rather than mugging up the
facts
just to clear exams. The entire
education
system is based on concept building based on
facts
.
Furthermore
,
facts
are dependent on
notion
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and concepts.
Skills
are based on concepts. In order to become proficient in
skills
learners have to
understood
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facts
first
then
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and then
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apply them in life.
Skills
are practical application of
facts
on which
professional
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professionals
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have been taught. Practical
skills
are
extension
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an extension
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of knowledge taught in schools and universities. There can not be a case where
skills
can be acquired without knowledge of
facts
.
For example
, in medical science Without factual knowledge of
human
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body surgery can not be taught. In conclusion,
although
skills
are requisite to survive in
practical
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the practical
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world still
facts
importance
in
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learning can not be underestimated. I am of the opinion that
facts
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learning is
much
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important and in
learnings
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learning
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at all levels of
education
focus is given to factual learning.
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Ensure your essay contains a clear thesis statement that reflects your opinion. In the body paragraphs, focus on developing clear topic sentences followed by explanations and examples that directly relate to your thesis. Make certain that your examples are specific and substantiated, to demonstrate clear relevance to the topic.
coherence cohesion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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