The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.

The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.
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The line graph illustrates information about the revenue of the three most commonly bought items in a particular bakery in 2014.
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, there are three different tendencies, pies experienced a steady rise,
whereas
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others had crazy fluctuations both ways. In January, the total revenue of buns was 40,000,000 dollars,
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then
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and then
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that number increased steadily up until May, almost doubling in revenue at 70,000,000 $. These numbers remained the same for 4 months after they dropped dramatically to 30,000,000 $
at the end
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of the year.
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, pies had a gradual rise, where it rose from 10,000,000 to 40,000,000 in the end. In comparison, the sales of bread were 80,000,000 $
initially
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,
then
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they dropped significantly in the next two months. Afterwards, bread experienced crazy fluctuations, which lasted until September and sales started to increase steadily, ending the year from the point, where it started at 80,000,000 $.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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