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The chart below shows the average household spending pattern for households in three income categories as a proportion of their income.

The chart below shows the average household spending pattern for households in three income categories as a proportion of their income.
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The bar chart provides information about the proportion of their
income
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 to average household spending in three
income
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categories
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.
Overall
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, housing takes up almost the same percentage in all
categories
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,
whereas
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 retirement savings vary significantly depending on the
income
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 level. Housing takes almost one-third of salaries for all
categories
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,
on the other hand
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, eating out is almost the same for the three levels, 4% for high and medium
income
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 and 3% for low
income
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. In comparison, food varies significantly, where it drops almost by half in every category from 12 per cent for low salaries to 5 per cent for high salaries. The opposite to it is retirement savings, where 17%
for
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 high
wages
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 and 3
percent
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per cent
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 for low
wages
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. Education is almost the same for low and medium
wages
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 at 3%, but it takes up 6% for high
wages
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. Clothing and entertainment comprise nearly the same percentage of 10 for the three
categories
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, categories, wages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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