The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.

The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
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The table compares the salaries of secondary and high school educators
in particular
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countries in 2009.
Overall
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, five countries were considered, including Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan, and Korea. Teachers in Luxembourg had the highest income,
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those who
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from Korea
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lowest.
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, Australian
earinings
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earnings
started from 28000, accounting for the lowest initial payment for teachers in the table. Following that, 34000 and 45000 were earned by those who lived in Japan and Denmark, respectively. The significant pay at the start for
Luzembourg
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Luxembourg
was 80000, surpassing the other salaries in the table.
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, if individuals worked for longer than 15 years, the salaries grew from 119000 to 132000 in Luxembourg, from 65000 to 86000 in Japan, and from 48000 to 62000 in Korea.
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trend was not noticed in Australia, where the number stayed at 48000,
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in Denmark, representing 54000
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paycheck even after a long period of working.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary school
  • high school
  • earnings
  • salaries
  • cost of living
  • demand
  • governmental budgets
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • economic health
  • quality of education
  • retention rates
  • social recognition
  • professional status
  • financial stability
  • performance
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