The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.
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The bar graph illustrates the data on the male and female employment rates in six countries in two years, 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, there was a significant increase in the number of male and female
workers
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in every country in both years. The data show that Iceland had higher average male
workers
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than other countries. In 1995, the figure for male
workers
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in Iceland was approximately 70%, and
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It increased to 85% in 2005. In the second place, there was Switzerland as the country with the average male
workers
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at about 65% in 1995 and it grew up to around 78% in 2005.
In contrast
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, Switzerland had a higher average of female
workers
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than other countries in both years. In 1995, the number of female
workers
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reached 55% and it increased to 65% in 2005. In second place was the USA with the number of female
workers
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more than 40% in 1995 and
then
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it had a significant
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to 60% in 2005. .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • economic indicators
  • comparative analysis
  • trends and patterns
  • economic factors
  • stability and change
  • sector-specific
  • job market
  • workforce participation
  • fluctuations
  • economic growth
  • unemployment
  • recession
  • boom
  • labor market dynamics
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