Many people feel school children should not be given homework whilst others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Homework
is part of our childhood memories,
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matter
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is good or
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.
Therefore
, when we grow up, we discuss the
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necessary
in school life. Some
people
agree with that, but others do not. Some
people
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homework
might not effectively enhance learning. In our childhood, the most important thing is to open
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mind
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to explore the world, to grow our
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curiosity
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how
the
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thing goes.
Then
the child can find what they
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interest
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to
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, the
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thing
things
they love.
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everything
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in the class is useful in reality. Like Steven
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who drop out after
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first year of
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university. Because he
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out it is not
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worthy
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. And school children might not understand what they are
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and
interest
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interests
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.
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are.
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So they disagree
the
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homework
should be given
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school children
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schoolchildren
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. But it is not everyone
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disagrees
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the
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homework
is useless. Some
people
think
homework
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learning, encourages discipline and time management, and allows for practice beyond the classroom. Those soft skills
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a key point to finishing things smoothly. After
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, most
of
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people
fit in
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work. Most of the time is hard to follow the schedule. If we start learning from our childhood, we can be more
productly
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productive
in our work.
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Additionally
, the
homework
might help
on
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building family
connection
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, too. If
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need some help from their parents, they have more time to
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together. In my opinion,
homework
is part of my life. Even
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, it is hard to
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achieve
sometimes. But It does help on
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memory
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with my family.
However
, It still
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a
balanced
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on the quantity. We can focus on the concept as a lesson learning for children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic improvement
  • stress and burnout
  • leisure time
  • enhance learning
  • reinforces learning
  • discipline
  • time management
  • parental involvement
  • individual assessment
  • balanced approach
  • busywork
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