OPIC: In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

Change a common part of life. In
this
era, changes in the household structure and members'
role
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roles
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are inevitable.
This
shift in the structure and roles results in some consequences. In
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essay, I will explain my reasons why I think these changes provide
positives
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impacts. First of all, nowadays, society is
open minded
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about equality degree between men and women. Many husbands take
a
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role
as
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a
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apply
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house
husband
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husbands
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, doing home
works
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work
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and
take
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care
their
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children.
While
wives go to work and become
backbone
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of the family.
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Conclusion
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Task Response
Cover all parts of the prompt thoroughly, including the types of changes and discussing positive and negative aspects of these changes.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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