The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
This
line graph illustrates the differences in the quantity and varieties of junk food that are eaten by Australian adolescents ranging from year
1975 to 2000.
Overall
, we can see that hamburgers and pizza rose drastically throughout the years and fish and chip
Fix the agreement mistake
chips
having
a slight upward trend before adjusting to a steady decline Wrong verb form
had
amid
the years.
Change preposition
over
Firstly
, we can see that hamburgers have a low consumption rate on
around 10 times eaten per Change preposition
of
year
in the starting year
before having a gradual increase to just above 80 times before settling at 100 in 1995 onwards. In addition
, pizza had a lower starting point in the starting year
in contrast
to hamburgers before reaching a peak of around 80 then
having a gentle stagnant growth.
Correct word choice
and then
In
the contrary, fish and chips Change the preposition
On
starts
relatively high Change the verb form
start
in
100 times eaten per Change preposition
at
year
, before dropping to just above 80, then
having minimal
climb to just under 100 before decreasing every Correct article usage
a minimal
years
to 40.Change to a singular noun
year
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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