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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
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This
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 line graph illustrates the differences in the quantity and varieties of junk food that are eaten by Australian adolescents ranging from
year
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 1975 to 2000.
Overall
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, we can see that hamburgers and pizza rose drastically throughout the years and fish and
chip
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chips
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having
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had
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 a slight upward trend before adjusting to a steady decline
amid
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over
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 the years.
Firstly
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, we can see that hamburgers have a low consumption rate
on
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of
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 around 10 times eaten per
year
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 in the starting
year
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 before having a gradual increase to just above 80 times before settling at 100 in 1995 onwards.
In addition
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, pizza had a lower starting point in the starting
year
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in contrast
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 to hamburgers before reaching a peak of around 80
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then
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and then
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 having a gentle stagnant growth.
In
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On
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 the contrary, fish and chips
starts
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 relatively high
in
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at
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 100 times eaten per
year
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, before dropping to just above 80,
then
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 having
minimal
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a minimal
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 climb to just under 100 before decreasing every
years
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year
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 to 40.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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