Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There are individuals who argue for prohibiting children from using their
phones
while
at
school
,
while
others advocate for permitting children to
use
their
phones
during
school
hours. I believe that there are no justifications for
this
. As
smartphone
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has
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developed significantly over the
last
5 years, individuals including
the
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students
may access
the
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information through their
phones
easily.
In addition
,
students
may
use
their
phones
in
class
to find additional resources, which can benefit their learning process.
In addition
, current smartphone provides various features to foster education
such
as automatic notes by voice,
camera
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a camera
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to capture
lesson
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lessons
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from the
white board
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, or
smart
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a smart
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calculator to solve more complex
calculation
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calculations
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. In India,
students
need to bring their
phones
in
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class
in order to do their tasks.
However
, these
students
may easily get distracted
due to
their
phones
, every time they open their
phones
, their focus will be lost if there are notifications popping up. Even worse, these kids
use
their
phones
to play games with their friends in
class
,
consequently
, they do not follow the lessons from their
lecture
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lectures
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.
For instance
, many parents in Jakarta
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school
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surprise
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that their
children
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children's
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grade
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grades
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dropped and found out that their kids
playing
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played
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a game quietly during the
class
. In
conclusions
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conclusion
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,
peoples
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people
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should embrace the benefits of
the
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updated technologies
such
as
smartphone
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smartphones
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,
while
school
may ask their
students
to activate some features in their
iPhone
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iPhones
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such
as
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off
the
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notifications, and only able to receive messages
for
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selected contacts, in order to
use
the phone wisely at
school
.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure you discuss both sides of the argument equally and thoroughly to maintain balance in the essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more clearly and cohesively, using a wider range of linking words and phrases.
Task Achievement
Elaborate more on each point with specific examples and clear explanations to strengthen the supporting arguments.
Task Achievement
Ensure you include a clear personal opinion in the conclusion, following the discussion of both views.
Task Achievement
Avoid unsubstantiated generalizations by providing concrete evidence or examples for your arguments.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Concentration
  • Emergency communication
  • Digital literacy
  • Educational resources
  • Social development
  • Self-regulation
  • Enforcement
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Technology access
  • Learning apps
  • Screen time
  • Peer interaction
  • School policy
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