Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There are individuals who argue for prohibiting children from using their
phones
while
at school
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their phones
during school
hours. I believe that there are no justifications for this
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students
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in order to do their tasks.
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, these students
may easily get distracted due to
their phones
, every time they open their phones
, their focus will be lost if there are notifications popping up. Even worse, these kids use
their phones
to play games with their friends in class
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure you discuss both sides of the argument equally and thoroughly to maintain balance in the essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more clearly and cohesively, using a wider range of linking words and phrases.
Task Achievement
Elaborate more on each point with specific examples and clear explanations to strengthen the supporting arguments.
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Ensure you include a clear personal opinion in the conclusion, following the discussion of both views.
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