Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent doyou agree or disagree with this statement?

In
life
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individuals have the right to have preferences. Various people
claims
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that currently they have
admit
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a lots
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a lot
lots
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of options. In my
personally
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opinion, I agree with
this
statement
about
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at present society faces very
much choice
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many choices
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and it has positive and negative sides. I am going to talk about the positive side before moving on to look at
opposite
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side. Folks
is
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having many
option
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options
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will be beneficial in certain
condition
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conditions
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, especially
they are whose
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those who
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love to compare
one
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themselves
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to others looking for the best stuff.
For example
, a girl
seeks
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goes
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in
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to
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the mall to buy some clothes. She
feel
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feels
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grateful
have
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to have
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many preferences in store that
most
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are most
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suitable
with
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for
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her shoes. She
try
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one by one
t-shirt
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which
match
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also
with her hair.
Furthermore
,
this
situation
help
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helps
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travel
agent
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agents
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to plan in order because of available some option place to visit. Because of it they just
grouping
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group
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destination
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destinations
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based on
the
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their
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location near each other or based on
type
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the type
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tourism
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of tourism
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should visit.
On the other hand
,
havinng
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having
a wide range of choices
have
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has
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disavantages
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disadvantages
for people specifically those who can not decide
thing
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things
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easily. A
first year
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first-year
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student
is struggle
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struggles
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to choose subjects for his major because he
do
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does
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not know about the material that he will learn and
is
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whether is
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it difficult or not, so really suit for him if the department already grouping subjects rather than he determines himself. In conclusion, I believe nowadays people
many
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have many
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alternative choices but it is
also
there good and bad things hand. It is back to their personality how to manage
this
issue.
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