Nowadays, more and more people are moving from the countryside to cities, which are becoming overcrowded. What are the reasons for this movement to cities and what are the effects?
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of better living conditions and standards and better economic opportunities. Correct your spelling
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as pressure on resources and increased economic development.
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are moving from the countryside to access employment and educational prospects that are available in towns. Use synonyms
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people
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villages
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cities
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were
jobs are plenty. Correct your spelling
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many students often choose to study in Add a comma
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cities
because there are a lot of universities and colleges to choose from. Use synonyms
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, others are attracted by better living conditions in Linking Words
cities
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were
they have access to Correct your spelling
where
high quality
medical services and clean water.
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the population will increase rapidly resulting in a lot of pressure on healthcare facilities and public transport. Overpopulation will result in poor service delivery. Add a comma
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it can increase the productivity levels in Use synonyms
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thereby boosting the economy.
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businesses
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people
move to towns and Use synonyms
cities
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