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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Thus
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This
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 form was demonstrated the
number
 of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
 between 2010 to 2017. In
this
 form we can see the total
number
 of tourists was
Overall
increase
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, but
on
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from
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 2014 to 2016 the
data
 was
keep
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kept
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 steady.
However
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 it has strikingly
increase
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increased
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 in 2016. The
data
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 and
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 have some
different
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differences
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. The
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
keep
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keeps
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undulate
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undulating
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 but the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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was gradually grow
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was gradually growing
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. Past 2011 the
data
 of
Visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 was evident
rise
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to rise
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 and the
data
of
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on
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visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 was slightly
decline
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declined
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.
Nevertheless
,
on
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from
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 2015 to 2016 the
visitors
number
 of staying on
cruise
ships
was keeping
Verb problem
kept rising
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 rise and
improve
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apply
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the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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, but The latter
was marginally drop
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was marginally dropped
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 and
fluctuate
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fluctuated
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, data, visitors, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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