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The graph below gives information about the number of estimated cars from 2020 to 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of estimated cars from 2020 to 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs illustrate
expected
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an expected
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number
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 of vehicles
production
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produced
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 in
hundred
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hundreds
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 of thousands between 2020
to
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and
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 2035 in four different countries: China,
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UK
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the UK
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,
Japan
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, and
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USA
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the USA
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.
Overall
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, meanwhile
the
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apply
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car
manufaturing
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manufacturing
 in China will
be encountered
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encounter
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 an upward
trend
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 throughout the given period,
those
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while those
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 of
Japan
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,
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UK
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the UK
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, and
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USA
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the USA
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prospected
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are prospected
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 to
be experienced
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experience
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 a downward
trend
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. Starting in 2020, 350 automobiles were produced in
Japan
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 which was the highest
number
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 compared to what happened in other countries, followed by those
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number
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numbers
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of
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in
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USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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, and China, at 300, 200, and 100, respectively. In the following years, looking more closely
to
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at
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 the
trend
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 in
Japan
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,
Albiet
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Albeit
manufacturing
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manufactured
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 the biggest
number
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 of cars in 2020, the
trend
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 of vehicle manufacturing in
Japan
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 will reach its peak at approximately 380 in 2025, and will gradually decline to 100 in 2035.
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, the production of cars
of
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in
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USA
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the USA
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 is resemblance to
those
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that
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 of
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UK
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the UK
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 which will experience
the
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a
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 downward
trend
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 and will reach about 50 and 30
at the end
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 of the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, uk, japan, usa, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • estimated
  • projection
  • statistical
  • to soar
  • to fluctuate
  • steady
  • noteworthy
  • incremental
  • exponential
  • forecast
  • saturate
  • plateau
  • peak
  • trend
  • implications
  • automotive industry
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