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A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/she has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * give details of the course you took at the University * explain why you recommend the University * give some advice about how to apply

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Dear Jerry, How are you, Jerry? It's been a long time since we've met. I heard that you'd like to
apply
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 the Autocad course at
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apply
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Odtu University.
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, I suggest
you
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apply
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that you should visit the university website for some advance details. But, I'll tell you what I know. The course is
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a totally
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totally
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20
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of 20
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 hours, and only weekends are available now. The teacher has
a perfect knowledge
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, so he can easily teach you every detail of drawings that you struggle to figure
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out on Autocad.
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, keep in mind that you have to bring your own laptop. By the way, I really recommend
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Odtu University because all
professors
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 have awards
about
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this
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 subject. Plus, they are well-known teachers worldwide. So, you should really consider these factors before
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another schools
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.
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 ,apply online from the college's website. When you apply, don't forget to add some records
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 as your criminal check with transcription of your current score.
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, find Mr.Papp and speak to him about how badly you want
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 course. Let me know if you need anything else. All the best, Atilla.

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coherence cohesion
The letter generally follows a logical structure but could be improved by organizing the information and ideas more clearly and transitioning more smoothly between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Try to maintain a consistent flow throughout the letter. Each paragraph should connect to the next with clear links or transition phrases.
task achievement
While the response is mostly complete, ensure all aspects of the task are addressed fully. For example, you could expand on the advice about how to apply, giving more specific steps or tips.
task achievement
The writing tone is largely appropriate and friendly. However, maintaining a slightly more formal tone could help improve the overall impression of the letter, as it is an academic course application.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • prospective student
  • alma mater
  • curriculum
  • faculty
  • state-of-the-art
  • extramural
  • scholarly pursuits
  • cohort
  • accreditations
  • holistic development
  • pedagogy
  • thesis
  • dissertation
  • prerequisites
  • mentorship
  • application portal
  • tuition fees
  • scholarships
  • financial aid
  • internship opportunities
  • networking events
  • career services
  • personal statement
  • deadline
  • admissions office
  • recommendation letters
  • portfolio
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