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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart given
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 the amount of various types of food consumed in different nations in
European
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Europe
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 over a period from 1979 to 2004. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the consumption of chicken showed an upward trend,
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 a reverse pattern could be seen in the figures for the
nother
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other
 categories over the years shown. At the beginning of the period, the amount of beef consumed was highest, at about 230
grams
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. The data on lamb and chicken were lower, at about 150
grams
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 and 140
grams
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, respectively. Meanwhile, fish accounted for the lowest number, approximately 60
grams
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. In the following years, the quantity of chicken ingested saw a fluctuating rise to 250
grams
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 per person in 2004,
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 after reaching a peak of around 240
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 in 1982, that of beef sharply decreased to about 110
grams
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at the end
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 of the period.
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, the data on lamb and fish gradually dropped to somewhere in the vicinity of approximately 60
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 and 50
grams
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, in the given order in the
last
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 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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