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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foregin language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advanantages of this outweight the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include some relevant examples.

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 an argument that some specialists suggest that beginning to study
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a foreign
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language
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 at primary
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 will provide more benefits for
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 rather than starting at secondary
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 and
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disadvantages
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 subject. There are two main advantages of
children
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 studying foreign languages when they are
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 primary
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. One of the primary benefits is
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 will have more frequency and
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 which is
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 the fact that cultivating and repeatedly training other regional languages earlier will produce more long-term memorization in their brain and could reach proficiency in
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skills
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, just like the athletes who have rehearsed for a year before
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 to achieve their
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 and make muscles automatically respond in the same way as in order to pronounce some words by
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 a tongue movement.
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, they will gain more opportunities for their future life-being.
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 is associated with facing job and academic competition which is advantageous for those who have more than single
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 capability when they age up to be teenagers or adults.
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, the study abroad requirement is that applicants who may not use an English
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 as a mother
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 need to pass the English test which
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Ielts
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.
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, there still remains the drawback of studying a foreign
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 at primary
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. The Main disadvantage is
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 will lack physical activities
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and learning
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times
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.
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 can be explained whether childhood is the age of physical activities ,visual memorization and
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 cognitive improvement. Encouraging
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 to study other languages will decrease the likelihood of these activities for
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 and may result in a lower development process of their social
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. To illustrate, When I was a child, I had almost a day to learn how to interact with other
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 by playing a puzzle game and doing some matching with a team.
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, recently I
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communication with other people compared to my sister who had studied in an extra class
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 particularly teaching sciences and
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 mathematics. It affects her self-confidence in social
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. In conclusion, the advantages of beginning to learn a foreign
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 at elementary
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 outweigh the drawbacks, whilst, the teacher
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who may look after
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 should
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how
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about how
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 to balance
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skills
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 and social
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure the essay has a clear and logical structure throughout, with obvious progression from introduction to conclusion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively summarize the main points and the stance taken.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support main points with specific, relevant examples. While some examples are given, they could be expanded upon for greater clarity and impact.
Task Response
Address the task by providing a balanced argument that covers both the advantages and disadvantages, offering a clear opinion on whether or not the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Task Response
Aim to express ideas clearly and comprehensively, making sure to fully explain the reasoning behind your points.
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Include more specific examples that are directly relevant to the argument. This will help develop the response and make it more convincing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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