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The chart below gives the percentage of social media users by age in Jamestown in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The chart below gives the percentage of social media users by age in Jamestown in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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pie chart
elaborate
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 the information about the use of social websites by five different
age
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 groups in
the
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Jamestown
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 in the given time
2018
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in 2018
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly that interest
of
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in
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 using popular internet sites among adults and teenagers
age
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 group 13-25 and 26-35 youth is higher.
While
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,
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 over 55 years elderly
individauls
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individuals
 showed very less usage of internet.
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 the
age
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 of 13-25 years old, they are very keen to use social
network
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networks
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 which is 40%. But as growing up to
age
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 26-35
the
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my
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 eagerness
of using
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to use
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 social media decreased
with
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by
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 5% and remained
35
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at 35
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% in
Jamestown
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 over the time period of 2018.
However
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, people of
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age
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the age
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 group 36-45 years older in
Jamestown
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 are only 15% who like to socialise with friends or relatives through online websites. When
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age
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the age
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 reaches
at
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46-55 the popularity of enjoying social sites
fell
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falls
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 down
at
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to
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 8%/. Only 2% kept using internet websites in the
age
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 over 55
in
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. So
it is clear that
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 the number of socialising online of
population
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the population
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 living in
Jamestown
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 was highest in 13-25 and lowest was in
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age
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the age
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 group over 55.
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