The supplied bar chart represents data about females in different age that gave a birth to the first child in Australia in the year 1966, 1986 and 2006.
The given graph illustrates information
due to
women's first
pregnancy to the first
time
in a different
Correct the article-noun agreement
different ages
a different age
ages
in Australia in the 3 various time
periods 1966, 1986 and 2006.
Looking from an overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the birth rate in younger ages
witnessed a considerable decline throughout the given time
in contrast
giving birth in older ages
experienced significantly. However
, in one particular given age period, this
percentage has shown evacuation in a given time
duration.
From the given chart, it can be seen that pregnancy for the first
child under the age of 19 in 1966 was about 30% in Australia while
this
number in 1986 fell to almost 20%, However
by the year 2006 it reached just over 10%. In addition
, having a child for the first
time
in Australia between the ages
19 to 24 nearly 60% but this
percentage dropped to about 35% and this
falling keep continuing with the recorded birth rate was under 30% by 2006.
On the other hand
, the first
kid inSubmitted by mahsa.ghorbandoust71 on
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