The supplied bar chart represents data about females in different age that gave a birth to the first child in Australia in the year 1966, 1986 and 2006.

The supplied bar chart represents data about females in different age that gave a birth to the first child in Australia in the year 1966, 1986 and 2006.
The given graph illustrates information
due to
women's
first
pregnancy to the
first
time
in
a different
Correct the article-noun agreement
different ages
a different age
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ages
in Australia in the 3 various
time
periods 1966, 1986 and 2006. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the birth rate in younger
ages
witnessed a considerable decline throughout the given
time
in contrast
giving birth in older
ages
experienced significantly.
However
, in one particular given age period,
this
percentage has shown evacuation in a given
time
duration. From the given chart, it can be seen that pregnancy for the
first
child under the age of 19 in 1966 was about 30% in Australia
while
this
number in 1986 fell to almost 20%,
However
by the year 2006 it reached just over 10%.
In addition
, having a child for the
first
time
in Australia between the
ages
19 to 24 nearly 60% but
this
percentage dropped to about 35% and
this
falling keep continuing with the recorded birth rate was under 30% by 2006.
On the other hand
, the
first
kid in
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words first, time, ages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • data representation
  • females
  • age groups
  • gave birth
  • first child
  • trends
  • significance
  • shift
  • later age groups
  • socio-economic factors
  • analysis
  • peak age groups
  • future predictions
  • past trends
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