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the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it

the map represet school map in 1985 and now. describe it
The two maps demonstrate the
cahnges
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changes
 which have taken place in a school between 1985 and now.
Overall
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, the school has experienced a significant modernization with more amenities
such
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 as adding
computer
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a computer
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 room. Looking at the details, one of the notable changes has been the construction of
pool
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a pool
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 and fitness centre, which encourages students to do sports when tired.
Moreover
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, new classrooms have been built, each
on
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in
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different
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a different
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 location. There has been
a
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an
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 increase in the number of classroom
block's
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block
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 storeys. Another striking point is that there used to be a car park
in
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on
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 the east side of
office
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the office
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, which has been demolished.
In addition
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, the library has turned into
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a resourse
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resourse
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resource
 centre, and
computer
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a computer
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 room has been added there. Another significant point is that there used to be walls around the office and library, which
has
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have
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 been knocked down.
Furthermore
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, the walls around the classroom block
has
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 been pulled down. The field in the south has been limited.
Also
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, the road has been expanded, which has
cuased
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caused
 the opposite for
car
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a car
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 park near the road.

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