The given pie charts illustrate the average spending on housing, transport, food, health care and other goods and services in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
The pie diagram shows the proportion of average spending on several fields,
such
as housing, transport, food, health
care
, and other goods
and services
, in Japan
and Malaysia
in 2010. In brief, Malaysia
has a bigger percentage of two of the five categories than Japan
while
the other three have higher percentages in Japan
than Malaysia
.
Firstly
, the two of five categories, such
as housing and food, are spent more in Malaysia
rather than in Japan
. Malaysian civilians spent more than 13% in the housing category
and 3% in the food category
than Japan
's civilians. However
, the other three fields, such
as health
care
, transport, and other goods
and services
, are more expensive in Japan
rather than in Malaysia
. Japan
's people spend more than 10% in the transport category
and 3% more on health
care
and other goods
and services
.
Secondly
, Japan
's people spent mostly on other goods
and services
, as many as 29% of all
the proportion. Correct determiner usage
apply
Whereas
, the least category
that Japan
spent on is healthcare
field. Meanwhile, Malaysians spent more on the housing Add an article
the healthcare
category
and the least category
that needed more money was health
care
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