The given pie charts illustrate the average spending on housing, transport, food, health care and other goods and services in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.

The given pie charts illustrate the average spending on housing, transport, food, health care and other goods and services in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
The pie diagram shows the proportion of average spending on several fields,
such
as housing, transport, food,
health
care
, and other
goods
and
services
, in
Japan
and
Malaysia
in 2010. In brief,
Malaysia
has a bigger percentage of two of the five categories than
Japan
while
the other three have higher percentages in
Japan
than
Malaysia
.
Firstly
, the two of five categories,
such
as housing and food, are spent more in
Malaysia
rather than in
Japan
. Malaysian civilians spent more than 13% in the housing
category
and 3% in the food
category
than
Japan
's civilians.
However
, the other three fields,
such
as
health
care
, transport, and other
goods
and
services
, are more expensive in
Japan
rather than in
Malaysia
.
Japan
's people spend more than 10% in the transport
category
and 3% more on
health
care
and other
goods
and
services
.
Secondly
,
Japan
's people spent mostly on other
goods
and
services
, as many as 29% of
all
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the proportion.
Whereas
, the least
category
that
Japan
spent on is
healthcare
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field. Meanwhile, Malaysians spent more on the housing
category
and the least
category
that needed more money was
health
care
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, care, goods, services, japan, malaysia, category with synonyms.
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  • average spending
  • housing expenditures
  • transport costs
  • consumption habits
  • health care budget
  • goods and services
  • economic factors
  • cultural influences
  • urban vs rural spending
  • disposable income
  • financial priorities
  • significant discrepancies
  • budget allocation
  • grocery bills
  • comparative analysis
  • fiscal management
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