Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause various health problems.
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health
habit. It Use synonyms
reduce
the unhealthy fat intake, which a majority of Change the verb form
reduces
a
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apply
health
issues Use synonyms
are cause
by consuming Change the verb form
are caused
meat
. In my opinion, I disagree because Use synonyms
vegetable
cannot provide Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
the
enough amount of Remove the article
apply
the
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apply
mineral
and most of the Fix the agreement mistake
minerals
protein
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are
from Change the verb form
is
meat
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by
eating the right proportion of Change preposition
apply
the
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apply
meat
will not make a person Use synonyms
becomes
unhealthy.
People becoming vegetarian could be Verb problem
apply
due to
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the
religious or Correct article usage
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their
personal Correct pronoun usage
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preference
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preferences
besides
, some of them still consume eggs and dietary products Linking Words
while
some are strictly vegetarian. It is Linking Words
also
called a clean healthy diet Linking Words
living style
which is popular in Correct your spelling
lifestyle
the
social media. It is a good habit to apply but partially not true because it doesn’t mean that serious Correct article usage
apply
health
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problem
can be prevented. Most of the Fix the agreement mistake
problems
protein
can be obtained from red Use synonyms
meat
, but it can be replaced by beans. Use synonyms
However
, some of the electrolytes that a person’s Linking Words
body
should Use synonyms
be received
can only Wrong verb form
receive
obtain
from animal products, Wrong verb form
be obtained
for example
, fish oil, and collagen. A recent study found that 40% of Linking Words
the
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apply
vegetables consumer
suffer from Fix the agreement mistake
vegetable consumers
the
chronic constipation Change the article
apply
as
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it
caused by Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
excessive amount of Correct article usage
apply
fibres
intake.
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fibre
Protein
is one of the essential Use synonyms
element
for the Fix the agreement mistake
elements
body
which Use synonyms
mostly
from Add a missing verb
is mostly
the
red Correct article usage
apply
meat
. Eating Use synonyms
meat
can help in building the muscle of the Use synonyms
body
especially for Use synonyms
body
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builder
. The Fix the agreement mistake
builders
meat
intake allowance for the person Use synonyms
also
varies, Linking Words
which
uncontrolled Correct word choice
and
meat
consumption can Use synonyms
let
to some Verb problem
lead
health
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issue
, Fix the agreement mistake
issues
for example
, high cholesterol. Linking Words
Thus
, proper consultation with the dietitian and Linking Words
get
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getting
an advice
on the right portion could be one of the Remove the article
advice
a piece of advice
a bit of advice
solution
, Change to a plural noun
solutions
moreover
, not everyone should see the dietitian as there is a mobile application that can track the daily amount in Linking Words
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this
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these
technology
advanced days. It is very important Replace the word
technologically
of
have a Change preposition
to
balance
diet Change the verb form
balanced
everyday
as not only Correct your spelling
every day
meat
and vegetable but Use synonyms
also
fruits take part in daily life.
In conclusion, becoming a vegetarian will not be able to avoid from getting Linking Words
a live threatening
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life-threatening
health
problems as some healthy fat and Use synonyms
protein
from the Use synonyms
meat
are needed. Use synonyms
Thus
, practicing a healthy balanced diet is Linking Words
a
best way to maintain theChange the article
the
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