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The table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major British airports between 1998 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Airport visitors, 1998-2003( millions of travellers per year)

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The table demonstrates data about how many travellers
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 airports over a five-year period between 1998 and 2003.
Overall
, what stands out from the table is that
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 airports had upward trends until 2003. Another interesting point is that Gatwick was the most popular one in many
years
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faced a gradual rise over the period. Looking at the details, as regards Gatweek, started with 36.5 million visitors.
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, it rose significantly to 44.4 by the year 2000.
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it rose gradually in the next two
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 it soared to approximately 70 million. Regarding Heathrow, it started
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 27.2
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 and
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 rose sharply to around 48, which was the second most-wanted airport for
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three
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 of the period.
However
, the number decreased dramatically in the next two
years
. Afterwards, it saw a sharp rise to around 45.5. Looking at Stansted, it began with 17.3, which was the least popular among others. Having risen considerably to nearly 40 by 2000, it remained
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 at 43.3 in the next
three
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Task Achievement
Make sure to include a clear introduction and overview. The overview should summarize the main trends without going into detail.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to ensure the essay flows well and paragraphs transition smoothly. Avoid repetitive structures.
Task Achievement
Include specific data points to support each of the trends or changes mentioned. Avoid estimating figures ('around', 'approximately') and state the exact data presented.
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Double-check the names and figures provided. It appears there are inconsistencies with the airport names and the statistics reported (e.g., 'Gatweek' instead of 'Gatwick').
Task Achievement
Try to make meaningful comparisons between data points where relevant. This is an essential aspect of summarizing information effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Conclude the essay with a brief summary of the main points to reinforce the information and the central trends discussed.

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