The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph demonstrates data about how many people visited three museums over a five-year period between 2000 and 2005.

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, what stands out from the graph is that both MET and Edo-Tokyo had experienced a decrease,

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, the National Museum of China

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witnessed a consistent rise. Another interesting point is that in 2005, the National Museum was the most popular one among others. Looking at the details, regarding the National Museum, it started with around 6 million visitors, which was the least famous one in 2000. Having increased considerably to approximately 9 million by 2002, it

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remained stable at nearly 11 in the next two years.

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, it increased sharply to just over 15.5.

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, as regards MET and Edo-Tokyo, MET started at just 12.

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the number fell to 6

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and remained stable for two years.

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7 in 2003, and

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rapid growth to just 14 by 2005. Edo-Tokyo began with around 13 million visitors and remained by 2001, which made it the most famous one.

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,in spite of decreasing dramatically to 8 by 2004, it rose considerably to 10 in 2005.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Trends: pattern, fluctuation, surge, decline, steady, increase, decrease
Descriptions: peaked, dipped, plateaued, exceeded, surpassed, remained stable
Comparative language: compared to, in contrast, similarly, whereas, while
Museum-specific: exhibition, gallery, curator, artefact, exhibition, visitor attractions
Quantitative terms: number, percentage, proportion, majority, minority
Time phrases: over the period, from...to, during, by the end of, in the year of
Conclusive phrases: in summary, overall, to conclude, in conclusion, it is apparent that

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