User Some people believe that studying online is more effective than studying on campus while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion which one you think is most effective.

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technology, online studying has become easier. Individuals have different views on whether online lessons are much more convenient than interactive classes.
While
others still believe that studying on
campus
is effective. There are a number of reasons why some people prefer online structures more
easier
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, than interactive lessons. One possible reason is that people can attend online classes from their
home
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just by using a laptop.
However
, join the lessons from any part of the world.
While going
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to College takes
time
and is stuck in high traffic to get into their College.
In addition
,
students
can join the classes and interact with classmates,
qualified
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teachers as well.
Students
found online studies flexible
not
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only convenient but
also
consuming less
time
.
For example
, if some people have a
part
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time
job they can join the class from their workplace by using a laptop with a good network. Despite the above arguments, it cannot be denied that studying on
campus
is not effective,
firstly
,
students
are allowed to interact with their classmates face to face.
Moreover
,
students
do their assignments with a group.
Secondly
,
students
may have problems understanding any question or structure they can solve by their Teacher
at
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classroom
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.
Thus
,
instead
of studying on
campus
for education.
Students
are able to study better as they can record voice or video
while
studying online. In convulsions,
although
online studying is much more convenient and flexible, it is
time consuming
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. But studying on
campus
is the best method to learn.
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Ensure that you address the task fully by discussing both views presented in the prompt and giving your own opinion. Make certain that your position is clear throughout the essay and particularly in the conclusion.

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