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User Some people believe that studying online is more effective than studying on campus while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion which one you think is most effective.

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 technology, online studying has become easier. Individuals have different views on whether online lessons are much more convenient than interactive classes.
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 others still believe that studying on
campus
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 is effective. There are a number of reasons why some people prefer online structures more
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, than interactive lessons. One possible reason is that people can attend online classes from their
home
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 just by using a laptop.
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, join the lessons from any part of the world.
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While going
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 to College takes
time
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 and is stuck in high traffic to get into their College.
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,
students
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 can join the classes and interact with classmates,
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 teachers as well.
Students
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 found online studies flexible
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 only convenient but
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 consuming less
time
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.
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, if some people have a
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time
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 job they can join the class from their workplace by using a laptop with a good network. Despite the above arguments, it cannot be denied that studying on
campus
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 is not effective,
firstly
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,
students
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 are allowed to interact with their classmates face to face.
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,
students
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 do their assignments with a group.
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,
students
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 may have problems understanding any question or structure they can solve by their Teacher
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classroom
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.
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,
instead
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 of studying on
campus
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 for education.
Students
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 are able to study better as they can record voice or video
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 studying online. In convulsions,
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 online studying is much more convenient and flexible, it is
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time consuming
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. But studying on
campus
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 is the best method to learn.
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structure
Make sure that your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your thesis statement clearly. The body paragraphs should each discuss one main point, and the conclusion should summarize your arguments and restate your opinion.
cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices (e.g., moreover, however, in addition) effectively to help structure your argument and link your ideas together smoothly. Be mindful of overusing these expressions and ensure they are used appropriately.
development
Work on developing each main point with a clear topic sentence followed by explanations, and relevant examples. Fully elaborate on your arguments to strengthen your essay and provide clear, detailed examples where possible.
task response
Ensure that you address the task fully by discussing both views presented in the prompt and giving your own opinion. Make certain that your position is clear throughout the essay and particularly in the conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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