the graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014

the graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014
The given line chart compares the fluctuation in the cost of copper, nickel and zinc every month over a certain year.
Overall
, it is clearly seen from the chart that the changes in the price experienced a period of erratic behaviours for all factors during 2014.
In addition
, all the
catagories
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categories
faced a downward trend from
January
to June
and
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followed by a statistical pattern;
moreover
, recovered it's upwards. Looking at the details, Nickel's cost hit the highest point in
January
at 6 which was a large amount, during the whole term. It was followed by a significant fall till June in the bottom out at
mines
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three and
also
after a constant course, level out at one to the end. In the same term, in
January
the amount of Zinc fluctuations rose sharply;
this
was followed by a dramatic decline in
January
at mines one and regained its upward trend to the end of the course at two.
Finally
, unlike others Copper saw a remarkable increase at the start,
although
the same as Nickel and Zinc decreased to June well under zero; It stayed unchanged from July to September at one, and
also
moved down and up to the end of term at just under two.
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