Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some people believe that increasing the minimum
age
for vehicles or motorbikes
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drivers
is
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way to make the road
more safe
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,
this
essay
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strongly
agree
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with
this
idea because
this
would reduce
accedntis
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accidents
numbers and increase
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of responsibility . on
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hand,
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increasing
the minimum
age
of
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drivers
of
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cars and motorbike means that the number of
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accidents
would go down , in other
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,
drivirs
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drivers
become more
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aware
of danger and more
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careful
carefully
as they grow older , so
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that's
that
leed to
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the roles and regulation in more respect and
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awareness
,
for example
in middle east countries where driving license are
issue
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at 21 numbers of
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traffic
trace
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accident
are lower in compare to another
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country
countries
who
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drive
drives
at 18 years old. on
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,
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increasing
the minimum
age
means that
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drivers
are more responsible ,
this
is to say that when the
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driver
start to drive at
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age
they are more responsible down the street so they
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ensure
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to follow
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and stay on the
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level
speed ,
as a
result
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they will less likely to hit any persons or
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down the way .
for
instance
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guys who start to drive at
older
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an older
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age
like 21 are more
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careful
driving their vehicles in
compare
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with
18 years old
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18-year-olds
. In
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conclusion
, I strongly agree with
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increasing
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the minimum
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age
of driving
cares
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cars
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and
motorbiks
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motorbikes
motorbike
because it
reduce
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the number of care
accedent
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accidents
along with
drivers
been
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being
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more responsible .
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