The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The paragraph

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contains

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information about the fan following of well-known people on

Instagram

between 2018 and 2021.

Overall

, Win all the figures taken into consideration, it can be vividly seen that the maximum fan following obtained by Cristiano Ronaldo

while

remaining for people has

least

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the least

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popularity on

Instagram

in the Govt period. analysing the bar graph, it can be seen clearly that the fan following of Cristiano Ronaldo on

Instagram

was around

hundred

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a hundred

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million

in 2018

whereas

this

trend experienced

sharp

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a sharp

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price and increased by 210

million

followers

and

stable

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was stable

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at almost 3 20

million

followers

.the popularity of the rock and Ariana Grande was around 95

million

and 1 110

million

in 2018 respectively.In the case of

2021

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2021,

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both 10

was

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were

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identical it was around 250

million

followers

Further

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Further,

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the bar graph collates that the

followers

of Selena Gomez

was

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were

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around 20

million

more than Kylie Jenner in 2018 on

Instagram

. The growth of

followers

in both

Instagram

account

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accounts

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was almost similar in 2021

that

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which

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was

also

around 250000,000

followers

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Vocabulary: Replace the words instagram, million, followers with synonyms.

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