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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line charts present the changes in ownership of electronic devices and the amount of
time
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 spent doing household activities in households in one nation from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the possession of washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners increased throughout the period of
time
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.
Conversely
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, the number of
hours
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 of housework per
week
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 per household was constantly decreasing over the same period of
time
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. Refrigerators experienced a massive increase in ownership, starting from slightly above 0% to 90% in only 40 years, and peaking at 100% in 1980. In the same manner, vacuum cleaners had a constant growth, starting at 30% and peaking alongside refrigerators in 2000.
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 washing machine was first ranked in ownership in 1920, it was only gaining around 30% in the entire period, peaking at approximately 72% in 2019. The amount of
time
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 a household needed to spend per
week
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 was decreasing steadily at a rate of 15
hours
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 per
week
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 per 20 years, from 1920 to 1960. After that, it only slightly decreased and reduced its number from 20
hours
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 per
week
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 to around 10
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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