Some people tend to take temporary jobs(they only work for few month of year),for they have time to do other things. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, there are many
argument
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relate
to the individuals who Wrong verb form
related
work
for few
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a few
moment
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moments
year
and provide their spare Add an article
the year
time
for other thing
. Change the wording
another thing
other things
This
essay will explore benefits
and drawbacks of the statement.
There are two main Correct article usage
the benefits
advantage
of people who Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
work
as a freelancer. One of them is that they will gain a
good mental health. Remove the article
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This
is due to
the fact that workers
who work
under routine will have a strict life and be under more pressure from their supervisors than those who can choose the time
to work
or take some rest by themselves and be independent from upper position officers. To illustrate, some office managers will have a schedule to work
for an
8 hours a day and rest just a few Correct article usage
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minute
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minutes
moreover
, when post working time
they must be tolerance
with a traffic congested before arrive at their home. Replace the word
tolerant
However
, people who have an
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a
non routine
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non-routine
job
can manage their time
which that
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apply
result
in more productivity and better mental status.
Another benefit of short-term Correct subject-verb agreement
results
workers
is they will have more opportunity to make the best contribution because freelance workers
can estimate the job
which is appropriate to their capability and especially proficiency, whilst, the routine worker cannot. This
situation will provide freelancers a chance to make better effective products, goods or any
services. Correct quantifier usage
apply
For example
, photographers who are good at taking a
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picture
of landscape geography can select the Fix the agreement mistake
pictures
job
offer that matches with
their skills and focus on only their final product if they commit to a temporary Change preposition
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job
,however
, the photo officers might have a variety of works
that they should be concerned about.
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work
Conversely
, even being
freelancers have a lot of good Correct word choice
though being
reward
, it still has a disadvantage which is destabilization in Change to a plural noun
rewards
career
path. Correct article usage
the career
For instance
, people who have been working for a long time
in the office may increase the opportunity to have a promotion for
upper rank and Change preposition
to
also
gain other welfare such
as providence fund rights, while
independent workers
do not have even if they also
work
for a while
compared to the opposite.
To
conclusion, working a temporary Change preposition
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job
still has more beneficial returns especially
in mental and productivity. Add the comma(s)
, especially
However
, freelancers still need to concern
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be concerned
stable
in life for the future.Replace the word
stability
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