The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of retain the table shows where the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons very relevant

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of retain the table shows where the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons very relevant
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The table and bar charts provide information about the
sources
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and spending of
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budget
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the budget
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of Britain police between 2017 and 2018. The table illustrates the three different
sources
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of income,
while
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the pie charts show the expenditure of
financial
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the financial
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plan.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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a large amount of money was spent on officers and staff salaries, rather than building, transport and technology.
Moreover
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, the national government is the only body,
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that giving
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giving
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gives
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a huge amount of
budget
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yearly,
while
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local taxes and other
sources
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accounts
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account
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for
minor
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a minor
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portion. In 2017, the national government paid
the
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a
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large amount of
police
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the police
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budget
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,
account
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accounting
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for 175.5
Million
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Pounds, which
was
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apply
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increased slightly in the next year to 177.8
million
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.
However
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, 91.2
million
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received from the local taxes in 2017, and 102.3
million
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in 2018. Other
sources
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(eg grants)
accounts
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account
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for the smallest portion of
financial
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the financial
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budget
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, they gave 38.
Million
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in 2017 and 38.5 in 2018 which is quite stable.
However
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, the total financial
budget
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of
Britain
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the British
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police
was
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apply
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increased from 304.7
million
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to 318.6
million
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in the preceding year.
On the other hand
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, a large portion of
financial
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the financial
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budget
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was spent on officers and staff salaries in both years. The proportion of salaries
were
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apply
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account
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accounted
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for 75% and 69% of
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budget
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the budget
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in 2017 and 2018 respectively.
Furthermore
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, in both years, 17% of
money
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the money
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was spent on building and transport,
while
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the expenditure on technology increased from 8% to 14% in 2018 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, budget, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fiscal
  • allocation
  • revenue
  • government grants
  • taxpayer contributions
  • expenditure
  • financial year
  • budgetary changes
  • capital investment
  • operational costs
  • shift in priorities
  • percentile changes
  • incremental increase/decrease
  • funded
  • allocated
  • resources
  • budgeting decisions
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