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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below

#report #university #lecturer #information
The following bar
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below
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 gives the information about incidence of X disease in Someland from 1960 to 1995. Unit
are
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 measured in total number of incidents for every 5
years
 (period).
Overall
, the incidents went up and down,
started
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 from 100 in 1960 and finished in 1995 at zero.
Altought
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Although
 the incident reached its peak in 1975 and 1980, but
then
 it moved down for the rest
years
. In
case
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 of
first
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the first
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 twenty
years
, the incidents went up from 100 to 500.
The
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 first five
years
 it went
stucked
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stuck
 in 100 living,
while
 it started rising twice in 1970.
Furthermore
, it rose dramatically in the next period until reached its peak in 500 and stayed the same for
next
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 5
years
. Regarding the next occasion started to down from 1980 until the rest of the period.
Moreover
, it decreased dramatically
form
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 1980 to 1985.
Nevertheless
, the data plummed towards 0 in 1990. It
sticked
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 on zero
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occasions
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occasion
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occasions
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 for the
last
 5
years
.
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structure
Make sure to provide a clear introduction and conclusion. The introduction should present the overall trends at a glance, and the conclusion should summarize the changes throughout the period without adding new information.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas flow logically from one to the other. Use a range of linking words to help guide the reader through the report.
detail
Include specific data to support your descriptions of trends and changes, rather than general comments. Use figures from the graph to illustrate the changes in incidence.
accuracy
Be consistent with tense usage when describing past events, and make sure to proofread to avoid spelling errors and improve grammar.
variety
Try to use a greater range of vocabulary and sentence structures to describe trends, quantities, and comparisons. Avoid repetition of words and structures.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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