Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discussion both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days individuals have detrimental eating habits through

consumption

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the consumption

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of a huge amount of junk

food

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However

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while

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some

people

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believe that the

soloution

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solution

is educating

the

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apply

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society, I would agree with those

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who argue

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that

this

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approach is not going to be practical.

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, teaching

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the public

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not to eat junk

food

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plays a vital role as it is a crucial way to make them aware of

harmful

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the harmful

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effects of

such

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food

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on their level of health.

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is because a country full of

people

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having medical conditions is a country with high expenses

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for

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medical treatments.

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, the number of

people

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who are

diagnoised

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diagnosed

with heart

diseases

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disease

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, diabetes, high cholesterol and other health problems

are

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growing

which

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and

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need prolonged and expensive treatments. The argument goes that prevention is amazingly better than treatment in terms of costs and humanity.

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, I believe that education

probabely

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probably

will not help to reach the goal of having a healthy society. The reason for

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is that

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this

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topic has been already

toughtwidely

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taught widely

via media and even at schools and many

people

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are completely

concious

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conscious

about

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show examples

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the nagative

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nagative

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negative

impacts of fatty and salt-rich

food

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on their

body

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bodies

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, they would not take an

aternative

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alternative

approach.

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, some families are in need or have to work two jobs,

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consequently

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consequently,

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the

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they

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probabely

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probably

cannot cover fresh and healthy

food

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costs or have a narrow window of time so they tend to have fast

food

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rather than home-cooked meals or fresh produce. In conclusion,

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it is of critical importance to discourage

public

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the public

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by cultivating from having

such

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meals in order to adapt to a healthy lifestyle, I feel that it should be

individual's

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the individual's

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choice and lay with them because

the

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apply

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most of them are

expexted

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expected

to be widely aware of what they eat throughout the day and it is the matter of personal preference and life situation.

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To improve task response, ensure that you fully respond to all parts of the task. Provide a balanced discussion of both views and a clear opinion. Expand on your opinion with more detailed explanations.

coherence cohesion

For coherence and cohesion, pay attention to paragraph structure. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and subsequent sentences should all relate to this idea. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

315 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

nutritional awareness
health education
informed choices
dietary habits
public health campaigns
preventative measures
regulatory measures
restrictive policies
food industry practices
accessibility
affordability
food deserts
health outcomes
behavioral change
societal attitudes
health risks
chronic diseases
lifestyle choices

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Some people say that all popular TV programs should aim to educate viewers about important social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Student learn far more with their teachers than other sources (the Internet or television). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some developed countries now have unemployment problems. Why do people still want to immigrate to these countries? Give reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.