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Marriages are bigger and expensive nowadays than in the past Why is this case? Is it positive or negative development?

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present, some
people
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 want their wedding will be pompous, so all
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people
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the people
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spent
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spend
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more
money
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to
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on
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wedding
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the wedding
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.
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is
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position will be good
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 if you have one boy and you
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rich
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a rich
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man
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, you will spend more
money
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 your wedding.
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,
magnificent
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the magnificent
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party
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 is not comfortable
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people
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 because in many countries live poorly
people
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 and
their
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 have many
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children
childern
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children
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are want
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do
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to
pompous
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the pompous
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 wedding and they may be
debt
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from
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rich
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the rich
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man
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mans
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men
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 want their wedding will be more expensive and bigger bisedis that, comfortable
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evey
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everyone
people
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due to
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have
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having
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 more
money
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.
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,
their
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they
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 have rich
friend
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friends
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 they will offer only rich
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man
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men
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 to
wedding
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the wedding
a wedding
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party
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.
Pompous
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 wedding is very comfortable and good for
people
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party
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 there ard more good food in
additionally
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famous
artist
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artists
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 so from
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a prospective
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prospective
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perspective
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marriage
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marriages
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 are bigger and more expensive will be
good
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a good
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 development.
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, in
the
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America all
people
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 do
to
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expensive
wedding
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weddings
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to
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for
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 their children
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 America is very
rich
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richest
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 country in the world
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, some
in
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people
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's wedding will be simple because
their
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they
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 have not more
money
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 it seems to me that,
this
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too
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is too
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 comfortable for poor
people
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 nowadays if
people
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do
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have
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 yo wedding
party
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thyo
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they
 will take
money
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 from rich
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man
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men
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nevertheless
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 they want their
party
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 will be big and expensive
this
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 situation is very hard to poor
people
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. The data suggests,
at
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that at
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wedding
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weddings
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government
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have
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 to limit
people
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 and expensive things.
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big
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a big
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city
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cities
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 all
people
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 do to
wedding
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a wedding
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 for only their relationship it
us
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our
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 position is very
economy
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 for
people
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. In conclusion, nowadays all
wedding
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weddings
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will be
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are
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 big and expensive it is position is
good
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a good
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 development
to
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for
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 some
people
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 but
this
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 change is uncomfortable
to
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for
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 poor
people
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 so
government
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the government
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 have to find
solution
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a solution
the solution
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 to
this
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 change

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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Ensure the essay fully addresses all parts of the task, both why marriages are bigger and more expensive, and whether this is a positive or negative development.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check your work for grammatical accuracy and work on your use of vocabulary, ensuring variety and precision in your word choices.
Coherence and Cohesion
Avoid overly complex or run-on sentences which can make your points difficult to understand. Shorter, clearer sentences may aid in overall coherence.

Your opinion

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