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The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts the percentage
additional
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of additional
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 ingredients of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added sugar applied in daily basis meals of
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USA
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US
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 citizens. From the overview perspective, it can be seen that
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the
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vast majority
people
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of people
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 in
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USA
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the USA
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 consume
sodium
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 and saturated fats in their supper meals
as well as
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 added sugar in snacks.
To begin
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 with, the proportion of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added sugar intake in breakfast considerably only in modest
amount
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amounts
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 14-16% a day.
However
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, there is an increasing amount of those nutrients added
for
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to
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USA
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 citizen's
lunch
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lunches
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 which are 29%, 26%, and 19% for
sodium
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, saturated fat, and additional sweetener respectively. Another notable
information
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 is nearly
a
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apply
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half of
sodium
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 (43%) and more than one-third of saturated fat
were
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 added
their
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to their
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 food for dinner.
Furthermore
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,
majority
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the majority
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snacks
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of snacks
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which
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apply
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consumed by
USA
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 citizens added
with
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apply
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glucose (42%) and only a few
of
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apply
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other nutrients.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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