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You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter:  explain why you need this time off  give details of when you want this time off  say who can do your work when you are away

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Dear Sir, The objective of writing
this
 letter is to let you know that I need some days off from work as my sister is getting married and I need to attend
this
 function. I have been working with
this
 company
from
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 more than 5 years and you always approved my leaves. But
this
time
, I want to
request
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 you if I can get 2 weeks off from 5th March to 20th March
due to
 her wedding. During my
time
 off, Ashok the sales department head is going
take
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 over
me
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for me
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 and I will
also
 be
working
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apply
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working online as much as possible.
Additionally
, I am available to do
over
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overtime
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time
 before or after the
request
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time
 off and I promise my days off will not
effect
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 the company at all. I hope you will consider my concern and
plese
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please
 let me know if you require any
further
 information. Yours Faithfully, Sam
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Task Achievement
Pay attention to formal structure: The greeting should include a full name if known, and avoid abbreviations (e.g., use 'I have' instead of 'I've').
Coherence & Cohesion
The letter could be more clearly organized with distinct paragraphs for each point: explanation, details, and cover during absence.
Task Achievement
For a higher score, expand upon the details of why the time off is necessary and how the work will be managed in your absence; offer to prepare work in advance, if possible.
Coherence & Cohesion
Using cohesive devices (e.g., 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,') would improve the flow between sentences and ideas.
Task Achievement
Ensure consistent formal tone throughout the letter, including the closing. Use 'Yours sincerely' if the addressee's name is known, or 'Yours faithfully' if not.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • requesting time off
  • minimal disruption
  • capable colleague
  • cover responsibilities
  • workload management
  • urgent tasks
  • accessible
  • considering your request
  • contribute more effectively
  • appreciate
  • temporary absence
  • proactive planning
  • smooth transition
  • alternative arrangement
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