Students at universities often have a choice of place to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.
Students who are pursuing their
degree
outside of their hometown need to choose a place to live. There are two common options of Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
accomodations
, university dormitories and apartments in the community. Both places have their own advantages, but I personally would live in an Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
apartment
among the citizens. I will explain regarding
the advantages of the Change preposition
apply
accomodations
and my preference Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
further
in this
essay.
A campus often provide
a dormitory for its Change the verb form
provides
student
to live. Fix the agreement mistake
students
Furthermore
, the strength of having an
university Change the article
a
dorm
is the accessibility, because the dorm
location is near the campus. Hence
, the students may just walk to their classes every day, not worrying about the traffic. However
, the flat outside the college also
has its own benefits. In an apartment
, we can live alone and designate the room as much as we want. Thus
, we can have our personal space
rather than a nosy roommate.
My stance is strong, I would chose
to live in a flat Change the verb form
choose
than
a dormitory. The significant reason is Rephrase
rather than
because
I prefer to be alone in my room, having my private and peaceful Replace the word
that
space
. Sure, the location may further
than the Add a missing verb
be further
dorm
, but I specifically will prioritize the focus on my study, because I cannot be focus
if there are so many noises. Wrong verb form
focused
In addition
, I like to expand my networking with locals, by living among the citizens, it is possible to have many local friends.
In addition
, both campus dorm
and apartment
have their own advantages. Nonetheless
, I prefer to live in an apartment
because I need to have my private space
. I may choose university
Correct article usage
a university
dorm
if its
Change the pronoun
it
provide
a spacious room for one, because having a roommate and a small Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
space
are the main reasons why I am not choosing a dorm
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