You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/ her. Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.

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Dear John, I am writing
this
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letter in regard to asking advice to choose between pursuing
educational
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an educational
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course or
job
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a job
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. Attending college will be
waste
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a waste
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of two precious years where you will have
decent
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a decent
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chance to explore
corporate
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the corporate
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world. College will not be able to provide that kind of environment where you can really upgrade your skill sets. Pursuing
course
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a course
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is not a good idea at
this
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moment as there are
plethora
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a plethora
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of opportunities for jobs
are
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apply
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available in
IT
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the IT
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sector. As these jobs will include
on the job
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training for employees. You will have decent opportunities to sharpen your skills
while
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working. I would like to add
further
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that, jobs in Artificial intelligence technology will be best suitable option for you. As you are
expert
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an expert
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in generative Tools of artificial intelligence. Companies are looking for people with that kind of skill
sets
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. Hope you
would
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like my advice and act on that. ALL THE BEST Jim,
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main point and that the paragraphs flow logically from one to the next to create a structured argument or narrative.
Coherence & Cohesion
Start with a proper greeting and end with an appropriate closing to create a friendly and respectful tone throughout your letter.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to focus on one idea per paragraph. This makes your writing easier to follow and helps you develop your points more fully.
Task Achievement
Make sure to fully address all parts of the task and offer clear, detailed reasons for your advice. Expand your arguments for greater clarity and impact.
Task Achievement
Maintain a tone that is appropriate for the context of the letter. In this case, as it's a letter to a friend, the tone should be friendly and supportive.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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