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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.
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It is argued that the picture demonstrates the floor plan of the social reading room and the differences between how it was 20 years ago and what is now. As a distinguishing quality, it can be clearly seen from the diagram that there were two round tables with 8 chairs in the centre.
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,there were two open spaces, which were named adult fiction
books
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 and adult non-fiction
books
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. In the library were 3 rooms for computer games, children's
books
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, reading magazines and newspapers and the area of an enquiry desk. As shown in the scheme, the central library today has significant changes
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 as an empty corridor in the centre. The Field of the adult fiction
books
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 was replaced from the left to the right side of the floor and an information desk and self-service machine were added. next to it. A particular feature to highlight is that the library became more convenient for relaxing
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 the sofas, storytelling events area and cafe
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 of the desk for tickets.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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