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The bar charts compare the average years of schooling, the number of scientists and technicians and the amount of money spent on research and development in developing and industrialized countries in 1980 and 1990.

The bar charts compare the average years of schooling, the number of scientists and technicians and the amount of money spent on research and development in developing and industrialized countries in 1980 and 1990.
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The graphs compare three different parameters namely the average
years
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 of schooling, the number of technicians and how much monetary resources were dedicated to developing programmes in two different types of
countries
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, developing and industrialized, in 1980 and 1990.
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, it is explicit that industrialized
countries
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 ranked first in all three mentioned variables with a significant difference from developing ones.
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, both of them kept their positions within the time. Regarding the average
years
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 of schooling, it can be seen that both developing and industrialized
countries
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 increased the duration of education, but they kept their difference.
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, the former saw a minor increase, from roughly two
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 to around three
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, the latter increased it from eight
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 to 10 in 1990. focusing on the number of technicians, it is comprehended that in developing areas just under 20 people out of every 1000 were scientists,
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, they had no considerable progress in
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 case.
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, for industrialized, it was 40 people in 1980;
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, they reached approximately 70 scientists out of every 1000 people during the next decade. In terms of the dedicated budget to research programmes, in 1980,
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 to developing
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, industrialized ones were greater by a margin of 100 billion. Subsequent to a series of changes, industrialized nations met a peak of close to 350 billion;
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, the other group almost halved their budget for
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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