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The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first graph demonstrates a clear increase in the
computer
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ownership
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 percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010. The second graph illustrates a comparison between
education
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level
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 and
computer
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ownership
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 rates for the years 2002 and 2010. Year by year, the
computer
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ownership
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 percentage of the population has steadily increased, as illustrated in the first figure,
whereas
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 it started at approximately 55% in 2002, 60% in 2004, 64% in 2006, 68% in 2008, and ended at around 70% in 2010.
Furthermore
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, there is a strong relationship between the
ownership
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 of a
computer
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 and the
education
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level
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; a higher
education
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level
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 is tied to a higher percentage. As shown in the second figure, most of the population owns a
computer
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 at a higher
level
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 of
education
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership, education, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • computer ownership
  • percentage of the population
  • level of education
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • no-qualification
  • secondary
  • post-secondary
  • graduate education
  • digital divide
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancement
  • accessibility
  • demographics
  • statistical data
  • data interpretation
  • significant growth
  • fluctuations
  • proliferation
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