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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in other countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, people choose to live or work.
However
, some insist that experienced professionals stay in their cities,
while
 others say that a
person
 can go wherever he wants. On the one hand, it is fair for everyone to work in the place where he was born and raised
,
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 because he should grow up there, get
education
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, and serve the Motherland with his potential. Especially doctors, engineers and many other professionals. If all the professionals go to other
countries
, the
country
 will stop developing and lose many of its citizens.
Therefore
, the state should create all the conditions for a
person
 to live comfortably and increase the number of jobs.
Otherwise
, it may lead to the departure of specialists to another
country
.
On the other hand
, everyone wants to visit many
countries
, meet new friends,
travel
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and travel
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 the world. There are many universities and
favorable
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 conditions for specialists to gain experience in other
countries
. Another good thing about other
countries
 is that they get to know their culture and traditions, which broadens a
person
's
world view
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. If you want to become a good specialist, you should go to other places In my opinion, it is important to support one's
country
 and not to forget, regardless of whether a
person
 is a specialist or the holder of any other profession, or in another
country
.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to structure your essay clearly with an introduction, at least two body paragraphs (one for each view), and a conclusion. Your introduction could briefly introduce the argument but should not include detailed opinions.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing appropriately to help the flow of ideas. Try to use linking words and phrases such as 'firstly', 'however', 'on the other hand', and 'in conclusion' to make the progression of ideas clear.
task achievement
Ensure that both views and your own opinion are fully developed, providing specific examples and reasons to support your points. It's important to address both perspectives of the argument before concluding with your own position.
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Avoid general statements. Incorporate specific examples or data to substantiate your points, and make sure they are relevant to the prompt.
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Work on creating a balance between both sides of the argument before presenting your opinion. While your personal opinion is important, equal consideration of both views will improve task achievement.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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