The graph below shows the number o f tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

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The line graph depicts information about how many tourists ( in millions ) visited Caribbean Island by staying on sailing ships and a visitor staying on the peninsula and the total of both from 2010 to 2017.

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, when all the figures are taken into consideration, it can be vividly seen that the travellers who visited Caribbean Island with any method were maximum of all the time

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visitors staying on the sailing and staying on the reef were minimal in the given period. As far as total travellers who visited the Caribbean Island were considered, it started from 1

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in 2010 and it took continued to rise till 2015 when it stabled around 2.8

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trend experienced constant fashion till 2016,

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, at the beginning of 2016 it obtained sharp incline and it reached on the highest position of all time in the given of

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year. Moving to the rest of the information, as far as visitors who stayed on the cruise were concerned, it began from 0.8

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the commuters who stayed on the peninsula were around 0.3

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but the former fashion was stable till 2011,

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, a later trend made a little rise of 0.1

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and reached almost near to former movement.The number of people who stayed on the cruise increased by 1

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but the stable of 2015, the tendency of people staying on a sailing overtook the former fashion and grabbed the position of 2

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travellers which was higher than the number of people who were staying on the reef.

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