The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.

The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.
The given line chart illustrates how much money
british
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British
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househould
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households
spent
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spend
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on their
children
's
sport
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sports
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activities
in
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on
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a monthly basis from 2008 to 2014. The second line chart compares
children
's
attendency
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attendance
in 3 different sports in
this
6-year period.
overall
, there is an obvious increasing trend line in
sport
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sports
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activities
expeditures
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expenditures
in
given
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a given
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period.
furthermore
,
number
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the number
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Swimmers
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of Swimmers
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and Athletics significantly increased and
number
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a number
the number
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of
children
who play Football increased just a little.
lets's
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get more
in
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apply
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details
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detail
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, the amount of money cost by each family
experience
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experiences
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a growth of about 10 pounds
in
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apply
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each month which means they
paid
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pay
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almost 30
pound
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pounds
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every month for their athletic
children
. in the second graph it can be seen
number
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a number
the number
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of
children
who swim rose by about 70% and there
was
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were
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about 3 million
swimmersin
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swimmers in
swimmers
year
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the year
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2014. if we pay attention to the period between 2010 and 2012 we can realise
number
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the number
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of Athletics rose by 5 times, from about 1
millions
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million
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athletics
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athletes
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to about 5
millions
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million
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and
outnumberd
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outnumbered
outnumber
the
amount
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number
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of swimmers.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • over the period
  • fluctuations
  • incremental increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • sporting activities
  • athletic gear
  • membership fees
  • coaching expenses
  • inflation-adjusted
  • disposable income
  • socioeconomic factors
  • extracurricular
  • grassroots development
  • investment in youth sport
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