The supplied bar chart represents data about females in different age that gave a birth to the first child in Australia in the year 1966, 1986 and 2006.
The bar chart compares the statistics of the
age
of Australian females who gave birth to their first kid in 1966, 1986, and 2006.
Overall
, it was more popular to have a baby at the age
from
19 to 24 in the past, Change preposition
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whereas
in the
recent years the tendency for those who are older than 25 and 30 Correct article usage
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Additionally
, for those who were over 40
it was quite rare to start a family during these years.
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To begin
, in 1966, about 62% of women who were 19 to 24 years old had their first newborn, accounting for the highest percentage in the chart, followed by the 25 to 30 age
group, at around 36%, and under 19 females, at approximately 32%. In contrast
, the highest figure in 1986 was for those who were from 25 to 30, surpassing the number of the
females younger than 24, at just over 35%.
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Furthermore
, only 5% of women became parents at the age
over
40 in 2006, followed by around 3% in 1966, and just 2% in 1986, representing the subordinate number among the others. Change preposition
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Although
just under 10% of women who were 34 to 39 decided to welcome a newborn in 1966, this
figure had reached to
30% by 2006.Change preposition
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