The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons
The two maps illustrate some explicit and pale alterations of Frenton between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
, Frenton modernized to a residential area with a myriad of top-notch facilities.In terms of radical
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, located in the Eastern central area of the map,
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and park made a replacement for
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and golf.
Moreover
, the west blocks of flats were constructed at the removal of the old houses, to the
north-west
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of which one additional block of flats were built. As for playing fields with trees, which
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located in the north of the town, they were demolished for the second blocks of flats to be erected.There were two destinations which were situated in the Western heart
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namely a hospital and a bank witnessed a slight expansion compared to their original sizes,
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, the latter redesignated into a restaurant for people to dine out.With respect to mild alterations,
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in the south-west direction, the area of trees was upgraded into a technopark.
Furthermore
, the
theater
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along with
shops lying in the
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corner
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substituted by a new cinema and a supermarket.
Finally
, the remaining features stayed unswerving in comparison to the previous map.
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