Some people believe that children should begin formal learning at school as young as possible. However, others feel that children should not begin school until they are at least seven years old. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

Children are the backbone of every
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.
Whereas
some people think that children should start to learn at an early
age
, others say that
toddlers
should begin to attend
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school
at
later
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age
which is
seven
.
This
essay discusses both viewpoints and I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
To begin
with,
toddlers
should have to learn at an early
age
because
that
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time their memory power is strong
due to
their brain is developed, so whatever they learn
it
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is not difficult to learn; not only learning the
school
subjects but
also
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learning the foreign languages because they have more concentration powers.
For example
, many successful individuals have started their education at an early
age
. Needless to say, both parents
also
have a chance to work when their infants go to an educational institution for formal learning. Hereby, learning the formal studies to
toddlers
at an early
age
has more benefits.
In contrast
, children should not go to
school
until
seven
years old because
this
is the right
age
to improve
the
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communication skills in order to the child have a chance to improve
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skills through
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with
the
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fellow students,
as a result
, they have more interests to go to
school
without pushing anybody.
For instance
,
students
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for students
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who enrolled
their
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basis
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education after
seven
, their academic performance
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on the top compared to
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those enrolled
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at
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an
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early.
Besides
, pupils like to know other things rather than their academic syllabus
such
as language learning, arts and coding.
Hence
, studying at
seven
is the best time for the child.
To conclude
,
although
learning at an early
age
brings more concentration and memory powers, learning at
seven
assists
to improve
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in improving
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the
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communication skills and academic performance.
However
, in my opinion, about
this
, I strongly agree
with
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that learning at an early
age
is the choice for
toddlers
to study
the
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formal education.
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