Some people believe that children should begin formal learning at school as young as possible. However, others feel that children should not begin school until they are at least seven years old. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.
Children are the backbone of every
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Whereas
some people think that children should start to learn at an early age
, others say that toddlers
should begin to attend the
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school
at later
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a later
age
which is seven
. This
essay discusses both viewpoints and I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
To begin
with, toddlers
should have to learn at an early age
because that
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at that
due to
their brain is developed, so whatever they learn it
is not difficult to learn; not only learning the Correct pronoun usage
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school
subjects but also
the
learning the foreign languages because they have more concentration powers. Correct article usage
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For example
, many successful individuals have started their education at an early age
. Needless to say, both parents also
have a chance to work when their infants go to an educational institution for formal learning. Hereby, learning the formal studies to toddlers
at an early age
has more benefits.
In contrast
, children should not go to school
until seven
years old because this
is the right age
to improve the
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their
social
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as a result
, they have more interests to go to school
without pushing anybody. For instance
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seven
, their academic performance is
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Besides
, pupils like to know other things rather than their academic syllabus such
as language learning, arts and coding. Hence
, studying at seven
is the best time for the child.
To conclude
, although
learning at an early age
brings more concentration and memory powers, learning at seven
assists to improve
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in improving
the
communication skills and academic performance. Correct article usage
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However
, in my opinion, about this
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age
is the choice for toddlers
to study the
formal education.Correct article usage
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