The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane.
The presented process diagram provides a
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overview of the stages involved in
production
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the production
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of
sugar
from sugarcane.
This
procedure comprises
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seven stages and those are growing,harvesting, crushing,purifying juice,evaporating, centrifuging,drying and cooling. The growth period
tooks
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twelve to eighteen months and harvesting by means of tractor or manual.Once the growth phase is over and the crop reaches its maturity,it is harvested by tools or machinery.The stalk
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crushing via
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resulting
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extraction of juice.The extracted juice
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into
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evaporator through a limestone filter which undergoes heating and results in
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,viscous form known as syrup.
Therefore
,the syrup undergoes separation from
sugar
crystals which tend to isolate the carbohydrate crystals from syrup.Later ,the
sugar
is dried and cooled resulting
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as the final and expected product.
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