The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the number of visitors who arrived at Ashdown
Museum
before and after its devevelopment
, Correct your spelling
development
while
the pie chart provides information about the survey results which were carried out to know visitor comments.
Overall
,many arivals
took place after the redevelopment, Correct your spelling
arrivals
rivals
while
the percentage of overall
dissatisfactions reduced significantly after the refurbishment.
With regards to the before refurbishment, It can be observed that 74000 tourist arrivals took place of which half were dissatisfied with the facilities of the museum
. Moreover
, 30% of comments showed satisfaction with the museum
while
15% of spectators were very satisfied. 5% of visitors said that they had no idea.
After the redevelopment of the museum
, It was noticeable that the number of arrivals increased to 94000. Furthermore
, a number of tourists implied their satisfaction at 75% ,of which 35% were very satisfied. Additionally
, comments on dissatisfactions
decreased considerably, which accounted for 20% ,of which only 5% were very dissatisfied. Fix the agreement mistake
dissatisfaction
Finally
, no responses were also
the same as before development at 5%.Submitted by Praslah on
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