The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the number of visitors who arrived at Ashdown
Museum
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before and after its
devevelopment
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development
,
while
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the pie chart provides information about the survey results which were carried out to know visitor comments.
Overall
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,many
arivals
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arrivals
rivals
took place after the redevelopment,
while
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the percentage of
overall
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dissatisfactions reduced significantly after the refurbishment. With regards to the before refurbishment, It can be observed that 74000 tourist arrivals took place of which half were dissatisfied with the facilities of the
museum
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.
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, 30% of comments showed satisfaction with the
museum
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while
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15% of spectators were very satisfied. 5% of visitors said that they had no idea. After the redevelopment of the
museum
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, It was noticeable that the number of arrivals increased to 94000.
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, a number of tourists implied their satisfaction at 75% ,of which 35% were very satisfied.
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, comments on
dissatisfactions
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dissatisfaction
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decreased considerably, which accounted for 20% ,of which only 5% were very dissatisfied.
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, no responses were
also
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the same as before development at 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitors
  • satisfaction surveys
  • trends
  • correlation
  • exhibits
  • facilities
  • service
  • overall experience
  • monthly distribution
  • peak season
  • off-season
  • visitor influx
  • satisfaction rate
  • enhancements
  • feedback
  • comparative analysis
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