Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socializing online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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information technology is more developed and still on the rise.

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and social

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are owned by everyone from different ages and statuses including teenagers.

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socialization because they prefer to

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meeting with friends or other

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online.

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why

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the solution.

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our daily lives. It

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us to connect with other

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from different nations, learn

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new knowledge and gather the information we need.

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the benefits, technology

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many disadvantages, and one of them is limiting our

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interaction

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in online socialization.

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to interact with other

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directly.

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can affect them not only mentally but

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at home without fresh air and sun exposure.

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problem. The practical solution is to reduce their daily screen

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or any communication devices. And

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outside

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dependent

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their phone

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smartphones

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can make someone become addicted.

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smartphones

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including reading a book, planting, and spending more

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with family and friends can help them

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become less addicted

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smartphones

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and socialize more with

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other

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in real

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. In conclusion, virtual communication is not bad but us and teenagers. But, we need to balance it with our

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interaction

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intimate face-to-face communication with our friends and family.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Be sure to structure your essay clearly with an introduction, at least 2 body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use topic sentences to begin each paragraph and maintain focus on the task prompts.

Task Achievement

Develop your main points with specific examples and details. Provide more depth in your arguments by explaining how technology affects teenagers' social skills and proposing concrete actions that can encourage in-person interactions.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on providing a clear introduction and a summary of your main points in your conclusion. Each paragraph should follow logically from the previous, with clear connections and transitions between them.

Task Achievement

Make sure to answer all parts of the question directly. Address why teenagers prefer online socialization and suggest measures for promoting in-person interaction. Expand on these elements in each body paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion

Improve the range and accuracy of vocabulary and sentence structures. Avoid repetition and aim for variety to more effectively express your ideas and keep the reader engaged.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

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to illustrate this
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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engaging
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digital detox
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