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You have arranged to rent a new apartment, but will not be able to move in immediately due to some personal difficulties. Write a letter to the apartment owner. In your letter -describe the situation -explain why you won't be able to move in right now -say that you would like to move in at a later date.

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Dear Mr. Brown, I am writing to inform you that
due to
 unforeseen circumstances, I will not be able to move into the apartment
this
 Friday. As you may know, I work at the IT company "New Generation," where my colleagues and I develop modern apps with unique and user-friendly features. Despite our best efforts to complete our projects on time, we have encountered delays. I have already requested an extension of our deadline until next week from my supervisor, but unfortunately, it was denied.
Therefore
, I cannot adjust my schedule to move in
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this
 coming Monday.
However
, I will be available to move into the new apartment next Wednesday, after completing my pending work tasks. I sincerely apologize for any inconvenience
this
 may cause and appreciate your understanding in
this
 matter. Yours sincerely, Adam
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Task Response
Consider adding a bit more detail to enrich your explanation. For instance, briefly describing the personal difficulties could make your situation clearer to the reader.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure a smooth transition between paragraphs for a more cohesive flow. This can be achieved by using linking words or phrases.
Logical Structure
The letter follows a clear structure, starting with the reason for writing, explaining the situation, and ending with a specific request.
Writing Tone
You've maintained a polite and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for the context.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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